my thoughts wander

this one is pretty... i actually cried when i was done. i didn't even think about what i was writing, i just moved the pencil.

 

 

          I can't seem to get over him.

 

I tell myself to move on.

 

           He has a life now.

           He doesn't need you.

 

     And yet,

               every time our eyes meet

 

  we can't seem to stop...

 

and I can't help but wonder

 

         even if he doesn't need me

 

                  might he still

 

      want me?

Author's Note

-sniffle- comments?

Reviews

[-Everchanging-]

Want and need... Where is that line anyway?
It's so cute and to place where many have been, but written in a way some have never even imagined. Awesome

[hershey's kiss]

omg thank you all so much! wow... ha i almost started crying with all your comments. =]

[Hannah!]

Wow. I know that feeling almost exactly. I love the format of this--it's not often that I read a poem where the layout of the words seemed like such a part of the poem itself.

Just wow.

[Allie]

This is very nice :) I love the way you cascaded the words, it added an extra feel to the poem. You've expressed a feeling most of us have felt at some time very nicely. Great job!

[Leah Elisabeth]

This is very expressive. You communicate a lot of things in very few words and that is what good poetry is all about! Good job!

[Tim]

This poem is short and simple but it speaks of things that are not simple and short. But speaks of something that at times is very complex. It is a feeling that many of us have experienced and still do at times. Great jobwith the poem

[Kelly Scheppers]

I almost fell off my chair!! What a closing punch your closing line gives! What is it about those lost loves that always draws us back, like a moth to a flame?

Into my favorites this goes...


; )