Loving a torturous soul

killers kill, criers cry, and lovers love

the wounds that you try so desperately hard to hide,

just become aware with just a slip of your shirt 

i knew you were gone before you said you couldn't confide

i'm never allowed to feel the things that you do

because then of course, you wouldn't be you 

i'm never allowed to see the things that you do

because then, of course, i wouldn't be the same

just for awhile, can you lay here with me?

i want to feel your nights embrace

just for awhile, can you lay here with me?

i want to feel your legs entwined with mine

just for awhile, can you lay here with me?

i want to taste your liveliness with my mouth 

one would think an individual could only take so much

but until i met you, i knew everything would eventually change

so just lay here with me, so i can hold you with one last clutch

so just lay here with me, until you're out of my range

Author's Note

I'm aware of my lack of capitalization. :P

Reviews

[DontBlink158]

i agree with coyote. Its an amazing poem, and i love stanza 2, cause i can relate, and thats what writers are suppose to do, connect. (or so im told) great job!!

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. I like the description and the emotion in this poem. We need someone and then we desire to escape at the same time. I like the flow of the poem and the perfect ending. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Daytonight]

I love the last stanza! Well done! Keep on penning.

[TheElfPrincess]

Wonderful imagery, I loved reading this poem. Well done.

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

This is beautiful! Your descriptions and imagery are intriguing and very nice! Each stanza increased in power...wonderful work = ]

-Femme_Gothique (Brittany)

[Day Dreamer]

Very well written, and very cute. Keep writing! :)

[~Juliette~]

Very nice and cute reminds me of the vibe of some books i've read. Someone's been reading! :D

[OT]

ominous and foreboding indeed - nice rhyme to wrap it all up - nice job!

[An owl on the moon]

Such a moving lyrical flow and feel.. the music of longing.. of loving... One comes alive in the presence of such a moment.

[Michael Knoll]

Very dark and moving. Well done!

I will say that you use just twice in line two and it seems kind of wordy to me in that respect.

But that's just nit picking.