Slightly Faded

How does it sing, and what does it say?

Incapable.

Not good enough.
Fat.

Stupid.

Worthless.

Usable. 

The words that used to mean so much, 

mean so little with every little touch,

your scent lingers on my clothes, 

with every little kiss, you fill my holes, 

Capable.

Good enough for me.

Beautiful.
Intelligent.

Worth more than you know.

Lovable. 

The words that make the most impact, 

with every little insecurity, you react,

because with you I know that there is hope,

and with him, I always knew how to get good dope. 

Suppressed and used,

undressed and bruised, 

stressed and abused,

messed and refused.

I'm wondering how I even got here,

and how I let you get so near so I could hear,

all the names you called me and and how much I bawled,

emotionally drained and nothing did I gained with you, 

how I wonder if you survived all these years and all those beers.

Glowing and love, 

Outgoing and above him,  

Knowing and beloved,

Growing and free of him.

Author's Note

I know the rhyming is a little cheesy.

Reviews

[trainwreck]

having a solid rhyme scheme is not a bad thing, but you need to be careful and make sure that it actually makes sense, which in this case it did. I was impressed that you managed a very consecutive story in this format with a rigid rhyme scheme. Great job.

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Nice, all expressed rythamically.. and reviewed imotionally..........

[DontBlink158]

i think this is wicked. i just love it, great job!!!!!

[Jupiter Jazz]

I'm going to hope that this poem isn't based off of personal experience..
It was deep and not emotional, but emotional... as little sense as tht makes. Twas good. Yosh!!

[WindSong]

Expressively beautiful writing. I enjoyed reading this and shall read more of your poetry.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Fabulous.......I know exactly what you mean about having all those holes filled. When we have been beat down by another and that wonderful someone steps in and helps us find our self worth and self esteem again it is glorious. As is your poem.

[P.M. Lenski]

SO good!!!

[J Todd Underhill]

I like this poem. Many reasons really but the ending mostly. I do want to let you know that the formating you use on most of your pieces render them unreadable while I am at work that is why I passed on most of your read requests... Sorry, most of my reading done at my work, and I need to be able to leave and come back to it.

[deeps]

Wow this is so sad and heart wrenching.
Very nicely done!

[Ruth]

Nicely conveyed love! Amazingly so! The freedom is felt through this piece! Love the strike through too lol Definitely free!
Blistering write!
Can see I am going to like your style! :)
xx

[Dayran]

Its wonderful. Its when you combine an attitude with rhymes that it stands out for its uniqueness. Well expressed, getting in touch with the muse within.