forever your eyes

this is a song i wrote for someone in the ast i supose it sux

it seems as if

 

every time i love

 

im falin apart

 

i hold your hand

 

and tell you that

 

you have my heart

 

you promise not to leave me

 

but they always do

 

i promise not to see

 

what your gonna do

 

cas if you choose to leave me

 

i still wanna be with you

 

and i can hardley see me...

 

livin without you

 

 

 

 

you hold me up

like a cloud

 

like the rain like the sun

 

tare my heart out

 

like this love has only just begun

 

hear me scream and shout

 

i thought you where my only one

 

tell me not to be crazy

 

when i cant make it latley...

 

so now im done...

 

 

 

 

 

i dont know how

 

you dont see that

 

im still here for you

 

i dedicate

 

every song

 

to what i go through

 

i hear you begg

 

in side your mind

 

just for me to stop

 

i want to so bad

 

but im still afraid im not

 

everything you wanted

 

everything you need

 

i want to hold your heart and

 

carry it with me

 

 

its no deadly burden

 

but i guess im hell

 

 

im sorry im not perfect

 

but neither is anyone else

 

 

 

you hold me up

 

like a cloud

 

like the rain

 

like the sun

 

tear my heart out

 

 

like this love has only just begun

 

hear me scream and shout

 

i want you to be my only one

 

tell me that im crazy

 

and i cant make it latley

 

 so now im done

 

 

why dont you see me standing here

 

crying in the rain...?

 

 

did i put you though so much as love

 

or pleasure or of pain?

 

this apathetic heart of mine

 

it only beats to die

 

ill open up these tears and say

 

its time to say good bye

 

though readiness is something that

 

i can not hold inside

 

 

 

 

you held me up

 

like a cloud

 

like the rain like the sun

 

i tare my heart out

 

because everyone finds it fun

 

i lost my soul

 

but im fine life has only begun

 

i gave my heart away

 

 

 

forever

 

 

your eyes

 

 

will be my mirror

 

 

 

 

into the past

 

into all of my past lies

 

�

Author's Note

im so sorry its not the best

Reviews

[Annebelle Ashire]

I loved it.
No one has said, from what I can see, that it's not the best,
the only thing that threw me off were certain words joined with others.

This is a song - and songs/poems speak the mind..other's opinions may count at times,
but in the end it's really what you were feeling right then and there.

~*AC*~

[+xDrunkenFairytalex+]

It's great! You just need to rewrite it so it's spaced right. LoL. I had to figure out what everything meant for the first little bit. But I love it. Just stay positive!
Peace, Love, and Butterflies
~Kalisa Rachelle

[The Autumn Faerie]

It may not be the most exquisite piece ever written, but it was written to evoke emotion from the reader, and it does it well.

Although the format added to the piece, I think you should make the font a little smaller because it kind of hurt my eyes... I don't know if it will affect others, though.

Nice work.