Deep in the Night

Deep in the Night

In the black inky darkness, all is quiet.
The world sleeps as my thoughts spin.

I peer up at the stars as they race silently through space.
I focus and I see clouds of many-colored gas.

My heart races from all the minutiae of this life.
I know it is but froth formed from my mind yet I cannot stop it.

Just when I think all is handled and under control it crashes again.
It is a cycle that should not repeat, but it comes back to haunt my soul.

My spirit wavers at the crushing blows.
Silence only amplifies the deafening voices.

In the end, I wonder is there an end?

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm not sure how to interpret the overall message here, but I really like a few of the ideas & how you express them. First, I totally relate to the feeling that the whole world must surely be enjoying quiet & dark, all except me, as I lie here spinning with endless thoughts -- the curse of insomnia so well described. And the 3rd stanza is a brilliant expression of insomnia, especially love "froth formed from my mind." It's so true that silence is a curse to the insomniac & background noise helps drown out the deafening voices. I'm just not clear on the final inquiry. It's a good question, but I'm not inspired to come up with any answers . . . I'm stuck in the repetitious cycle of insomnia, I guess!

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading my writing. You hit the nail right on the head, "I'm stuck in the repetitious cycle of insomnia," is the question I am asking in the last line.

[апян]

"Just when I think all is handled and under control it crashes again.
It is a cycle that should not repeat, but it comes back to haunt my soul."

I like this part so much

[Diane]

Very well worded. Not sure what it means but you have my brain spinning trying to work it out. That is always a plus!

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing this poem.

[Emily]

Love the first line!!
Keep it up!

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank for you for reading and reviewing my poem.

[Joshua Marshall]

This is a very good poem. I really liked it. The ending line made me think of dying. "In the end, I wonder is there an end?" That's the ultimate agnostic question.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. Yes, that final line could be taken agnostically. Someone questioning what comes after we leave our bodies. I think all my metaphysical poems will have a different meaning to the reader depending on the state of their soul and spirit. Oh, just to be clear, I am not an agnostic. I think I come closest to being a gnostic if anything, reading things like the Tao of Pooh, Dancing Wu Li Masters, Incognito: The Secret Lives of the Brain and so on have formed many of my views.

I am glad you liked it.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

A very good poem, sir. Good use of imagery and paradox. 'Black inky darkness'- darkness has been described in a sweet manner. Glad, you shared this poem of yours.