another incomplete poem

SO im practicing my writing. i really need more practice, I feel so noobish. lol, im such a nub nub

upon a night, beneeth the silver star
my world began to drift afar
i dreamt a dream and saw her face
her elogance and grace.
in the distance she gazed into my eyes,
and the world began to split into athousand skies.

Reviews

[Stephanie]

This doesn't seem incomplete to me. It's a very sweet and endearing poem :]

[Tallulah]

this is so beautiful. your imagery and description is amazing. it doesnt really seem incomplete though. i love it.

[Tracie Skarbo]

Wow great start...really like the images your words form for me. The rhythm is great too.

Tigra

[H.Y]

lol, im so lame i cant spell.

[Flo_writer]

This is nice, I wonder what it would be like to see a thousand skies. Correct some of your errors...."beneeth" should be beneath. Also you need a space in between "a" and "thousand"