Clouded Minds

Nothing matters. Just be you.

Our minds are clouded

by different stimuli.

We're broken down,

taking drugs

to get the fix in us.

Opened up, puff puff

just pass it along.

I understand life is tough, but

keep your head up

be strong.

You can make it,

I believe in you.

Whenever someone wants to judge,

just be you.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think about it.
Is it too simple? What is it missing? Is there too much of anything?

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad. You have a good concept and this is very relatable, which is always a plus. I don't think you need the all-caps 'YOU' at the very end - seems like you're trying a little too hard there, and you'd get a more placid and solemn tone with it uncapitalized. Other than that, this is nicely done. Good work.

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you for the review! Yeah, the "YOU" was a last minute addition to the poem when I was typing it up to upload here. I do agree with you though, and thanks for pointing that out.
-Harrisen