Dracula's Daughter

Written for "Sonneteers Lend Me Thy Tears" contest. I meant to write a sad love sonnet but wound up having a giggle with it. Sorry Fran!

 
 
Dracula’s Daughter
 
Another hope, another call to life
Betrays the calm I treasure above all,
And weaves connections to an awe filled strife:
Blood sought, removed and someone left in thrall.
 
Cold mind, that dead, refuses yet to die - 
Dead heart, that stopped, returns to beat again -
Cedes but a passing thought to that last sigh
Dropped from two lips whose throat delights in pain.
 
Endless pursuit –what immortality!
Fearing dawn, I rise to greet the moon,
Eclipsing with my wings the Marian sea.
Force me, love, to leave your blood alone!
 
God, whichever god, give me the strength,
Grant mortal life to him I hold at length. 
					

				

Reviews

[PianoandPage]

"Dropped from two lips whose throat delights in pain." i agree this line stands out. i love the idea of a throat that DELIGHTS in pain.

i think you handled the romantic/violent slants of the vampire really well. the sort of dead, cold, passion, that hopes when it cannot hope. ahhh it is fine drama is it not?

and again it all boils down to our mortality... to "what immortality!" indeed!

great write. enjoyed very much.

[Samuel Dickens]

Creepy, yet sophisticated with a slight air of Poe. I like it.

[Alicante lullaby]

dark and more dark and an intriguing red.beautiful.

[Ladysue]

A dark one, I like this. "Dropped from two lips whose throat delights in pain" Very powerful line... An awesome sonnet...

[Raef C. Boylan]

Hey, excellent sonnet and because I read your note I didn't take it seriously, just enjoyed the language.
I liked "God, whichever god," and "whose throat delights in pain" especially but every line was well-crafted. I hope this piece fared well in the contest (?)

Hopefully I've read this the right way, or maybe just interpreted it wrongly for my own entertainment (but in a way that's ok with its writer)...I see it almost as mocking the current trend of vampire romance (Twilight etc) because of how dramatic and passionate it seems

crap, have to go, getting in trouble at work, sorry

[Wildecat]

Ahh a well crafted poem, I could imagine being there myself. Nice write.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

You certainty know how to write sonnets. That's for certain. I enjoyed this one very much. Sonnets are my favorite form to read and write. When written as well as yours, they are so refreshing.

Sal

[Brandon Meyers]

I enjoyed this very much. Both the structure and the composition were excellent. And as for the subject matter, an excellent choice. Nice write!

[T]

funny but not, you have an interesting sense of humor....well written and enjoyed much!!!

[James K. Blaylock]

I really enjoyed reading this well-crafted piece. Awesome job!

jkb