Wish I Could Tell You

Butterflies flutter in my stomach whenever you walk by...

You’re a little too perfect sometimes
With your brilliant mind, clever thoughts, smooth voice
I rejoice every time I hear it ring
But there’s just one little thing
Do I mean anything to you?
I wish I could tell you.

 

Did I ever tell you
Just how much I love you?
I love the way you twirl your hair
The way you absently stare
When you’re lost in your own thoughts
When I’m thinking of you.

 

I love your determination
You stick with each puzzle until the end
The most challenging puzzle is you.

 

Butterflies flutter in the pit of my stomach
Whenever you walk by
I wish I could tell you why
I wish I could force out the words.
I love you. I love you. I love you.
I just wish I could tell you.

Author's Note

I like how this one came out ^^ Two points of view, the bold is both voices talking together. Comments? Crit?

Reviews

[Drakana Wind]

This is really, really good. I like the way you wrote it from two different points of view, and yet were able to make them so similar and comparable. It flows and is realistic. Love it!!

[Wingless Angel of Dream..]

Ah ha i see, two points of view, i like that, and the emotion, i like the bubbly feeling it creates, maybe bubbly isnt the word for everyone but thats how it feels when u read something like that, for me... all bubbly... like butterflies i like ^^

[GentleBreeze]

You certainly proved your love here... Very well written and it flowed nicely. Is'nt love wonderful! I really enjoyed this read :)

[LisetteCanWrite!]

This one is very heartfelt.. with really great flow from the soul.. someone who is taken by another.. I know that feeling.. it is a combination of lust and curiousity... this can be a good thing sometimes... it's first attraction in raw form.. a deep admiration of another.. simply awesome feeling though.. thank you for sharing!!! =)

[brittneymarie]

Woww this was very good, it flowed very well and it was meaningful. I loved it

Great Job,

BrittneyMarie

[Tallulah]

Wow this is amazing i love it!The difference in POV's was subtle i didn't notice it until I read your author's note. Nonetheless this was a beaturiful piece.
I Love it

[Winter Poison]

...I love you.