Until The End of Time

There’s too much blood on my hands
He’ll never forgive my crimes
I’ve got a record and a secret vendetta
And you’ve got ten seconds to run

Red roses turn black
And day turns to night
An eclipse of the moon
An eclipse of your heart

A knife in my hand
A bleed in your heart
Darkness in my veins
Controlling everything
Taking over me

I tried to hold back
But it’s stronger, you see
And now heaven’s gates will never open for me

Fly with your angels and never look back
Don’t think of me or what I’ve come to be
You deserve peace, and that’s what you’ll get
Your tired soul will finally get its rest
Don’t worry about me, I’ll be fine
Waiting in purgatory until the end of time

Author's Note

Wrote this one a few months ago and just found it when looking through old documents. What do you think?

Reviews

[Kaitlyn]

Yes, the second stanza really lept out at me too. The flow is just .....captivating and the wording is just......wow. I love this and it is going on my list! IT is wonderful, I'm at a loos for words and that is pretty unusual for me...wow. I'm continuing the overuse of the word wow, because it is definitely needed. wow

[Andrew (not Andy, A.J. ..]

Wow. Wow. Wow.
I especially like the second stanza,
"Red roses turn black
And day turns to night
An eclipse of the moon
An eclipse of your heart"
Wow. Great.
One or two things though,
"But it's stronger, you see"
I don't think the you see is needed. It doesn't add much.
Also, as a I don't believe that if a non-repentant murderer died he/she would go to purgatory. He/she would go to hell. At least that's what I believe.
The first two stanza's are four lines,
The third is five.
The fourth is three.
The last is six.
I don't believe that follows any pattern, so I would say keep it consistent. Either all three lines or all four lines or five lines or six or whatever. Keep it consistent.
Gj.
--Andrew

[Marlena]

I like it ^^ nice flow

[Winter Poison]

I like it just as much as I when you first wrote it. :3 Great work.