I Walked Into A Fire

I walked into a fire
When I saw that man in red
Painted in dust marks on the ceiling
Just above my head

He looked down and smiled
And held his hand to me
And he said “Come let me show you
A world you’ve never seen.”

So I walked into a fire
With him at my side
Hand in hand we walked together
His skin was cold on mine

Tongues of flame lapped at our feet
But he just laughed them off
Said they were such pesky things
A charming little scoff

I walked into a fire
And out onto the shore
Soft sand grains danced beneath my feet
In the sky the black birds soared

He snaked his arms around my waist
And whispered in my ear
“My dear, what a lovely night it is.
Wouldn’t you just love to remain here?”

A wild wind rushed around us
And I looked into the midnight sky
And I let my head fall on his chest
“Forever, you and I?”

He swayed his hips
And I swayed mine
And we danced together
Beneath the midnight sky

I walked into a fire
And waltzed with the man in red
But sleepily I wondered
If I’d ever get back to bed

“Come with me,” he said
“You still have more to see.”
Again down that blazing path we walked
The man in red and me

I walked into a fire
And stepped out by a lake
A looking glass of sorts
Holding dark lillies forming wakes

He ran his hand along my back
And whispered in my ear
“My dear, how wonderful it would be
If you could just stay here.”

He took my hand once more
And said, “Come now, let’s go.”
And he went down his path again
With me faithfully in tow

I walked into a fire
And was led into a field of flowers
Petals of blacks and reds and golds
And vines twirled around a bower

He wrapped his arms around me then
And whispered in my ear
“My dear, what will your answer me?
Will you go home or stay here?”

I bit my lower lip in thought
And looked into his eyes
Soft and gentle, he looked back
How could I decline?

“I’ll stay,” I told him
And he grinned and a raised a hand
Wild winds curled around my form
Heeding his command

A spray of rain fell over us
Drenching us to the bone
He laughed a twisted kind of laugh
And I wished that I’d gone home

 

 

I walked into a fire
After signing a decree
Down there I’d live forever
Just the devil and me

Author's Note

I personally love this one <3 The ending I'm not sure about, but everything else I like. I'd love to get your thoughts. ^^

Reviews

[Wingless Angel of Dream..]

i had a feeling this was about the devil. it reminds me of that story about that man who got to choose where he would go after he died. he had to choose between heaven or hell. and he choose hell because the golfing mask and fun the devil put on hell tantalized him. but yea thats what it reminds me of. and i really like it. its long, but that's ok i really liked it flow and imagery and, just the whole idea behind it. i think the girl died, didn't she. and the sleep was death or something like that..

on the editing help note i found this here that confused me:

And he grinned and a raised a hand

loved it

[Twilight]

This was a real pleasure to read! In places, slightly romantic? And, atmospheric throughout! I like the more cryptic lines in particular, actually. One reviewer saw the length of this poem, as a kind of weakness. Personally, I don't think that is a fair comment.

The imagery is lovely in places, and this poem has been carefully worded. Thankyou!

[Fran Marie]

"I'll stay," I told him
And he grinned and a raised a hand
Wild winds curled around my form
Heeding his command

Tricky lil' devil that he was~ I enjoyed the tale inside this rhyming poem

the flow was ever so smooth for easy and interesting reading

a pleasure to read this on a raing afternoon~ Love It!!

Thanks for sharing this in The Midnight Magic Contest!!

[Adelia Alighieri]

This was a 'little' long but it was subtly scary too. I find the 'red' man fascinating. And the whole concept of fire in it is seducing. Great Job.

[xXbloodyVampire]

I cant believe what an amazing write this.
I loved the whole thing.
From the begining i couldnt stop reading.
Everything seemed to fit perfectly.

except the one grammar note that confused me which is actually mentioned in the comment before mine.

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I guessed it was the devil since the beginning ...
I love the images you draw in this poem
The flowers, the black birds, the flame ..
You've depicted a romantic voyage through this devilish poem xD
Nice job
Loved it
~Kavish~

[Charles D. Moorer]

Nicely done, I expecially liked the way you streteched this out, treating the reades in some ways like the devil, making us wait just like him. What is a bower, do you mean bough? Nicely done. Why the decree? what was the attraction. I guess that is the age--old question. Well written.

[R J Askew]

It reads like a ballad as it tells a fascinating story, though not in ballad form. The cold skin I felt.

[FANTASYKNIGHT]

oh wow, it's not often i'm left speechless, literally, gaping in awe at the magnificance of a literary master piece. This apsolutely magnificantly breath takingly amazing. And the way it captured my attention and i was almost forced to read further, like a mysterious story, pulling you into it's surreal existance as you read further, and you never want it to end. I don't think i can even express excellent this is.

Fantastic job well done.

[Fallen Angel]

This is amazing! I love it!

[Voice]

Wow this piece is truly just amazing!!!!! I love it!!! the way this flows and the message behind it is all so perfect. What talent you have! Brilliant, amazing, heart stopping, absolutely fricken awesome write!!!!!

Voice