I Walked Into A Fire

I walked into a fire
When I saw that man in red
Painted in dust marks on the ceiling
Just above my head

He looked down and smiled
And held his hand to me
And he said “Come let me show you
A world you’ve never seen.”

So I walked into a fire
With him at my side
Hand in hand we walked together
His skin was cold on mine

Tongues of flame lapped at our feet
But he just laughed them off
Said they were such pesky things
A charming little scoff

I walked into a fire
And out onto the shore
Soft sand grains danced beneath my feet
In the sky the black birds soared

He snaked his arms around my waist
And whispered in my ear
“My dear, what a lovely night it is.
Wouldn’t you just love to remain here?”

A wild wind rushed around us
And I looked into the midnight sky
And I let my head fall on his chest
“Forever, you and I?”

He swayed his hips
And I swayed mine
And we danced together
Beneath the midnight sky

I walked into a fire
And waltzed with the man in red
But sleepily I wondered
If I’d ever get back to bed

“Come with me,” he said
“You still have more to see.”
Again down that blazing path we walked
The man in red and me

I walked into a fire
And stepped out by a lake
A looking glass of sorts
Holding dark lillies forming wakes

He ran his hand along my back
And whispered in my ear
“My dear, how wonderful it would be
If you could just stay here.”

He took my hand once more
And said, “Come now, let’s go.”
And he went down his path again
With me faithfully in tow

I walked into a fire
And was led into a field of flowers
Petals of blacks and reds and golds
And vines twirled around a bower

He wrapped his arms around me then
And whispered in my ear
“My dear, what will your answer me?
Will you go home or stay here?”

I bit my lower lip in thought
And looked into his eyes
Soft and gentle, he looked back
How could I decline?

“I’ll stay,” I told him
And he grinned and a raised a hand
Wild winds curled around my form
Heeding his command

A spray of rain fell over us
Drenching us to the bone
He laughed a twisted kind of laugh
And I wished that I’d gone home

 

 

I walked into a fire
After signing a decree
Down there I’d live forever
Just the devil and me

Author's Note

I personally love this one <3 The ending I'm not sure about, but everything else I like. I'd love to get your thoughts. ^^

Reviews

[Wingless Angel of Dream..]

i had a feeling this was about the devil. it reminds me of that story about that man who got to choose where he would go after he died. he had to choose between heaven or hell. and he choose hell because the golfing mask and fun the devil put on hell tantalized him. but yea thats what it reminds me of. and i really like it. its long, but that's ok i really liked it flow and imagery and, just the whole idea behind it. i think the girl died, didn't she. and the sleep was death or something like that..

on the editing help note i found this here that confused me:

And he grinned and a raised a hand

loved it

[John Morris]

A good poem.

Fire;
Flame;
Devil.

And its well written aswell.

You create some really demonic pictures here 'Tongues of flame lapped at our feet'

[Gheeneil]

A devil could be very persuasive in so many ways. His word is one of his powerful tricks. Stepping aside that, I like the flow. It's smooth and detailed. This piece is dark and beautiful.

[jessie]

i thought it would end like that. nothing is ever that good and can last forever. very nice and very descriptive. i love the vocabulary. wonderful write.


~jess

[Adeline]

aw, this is so cool, I really loved reading it. it's more than just a poem, it's a story too. that's the kind of poem I like.

[abejoyal]

Truly beautiful. Thank you for so gratifying a poem. This is the finest iv read in a while

[Alexander Z. Anthony]

Wow. Loved that ending! I try to write poetry somthing to this effect, where you're lulled into a peaceful, almost romantic flow, and then *WACK!* You get sucker punched and the poet reveals their true inner wickedness...or genius. Kudos and great job.

[John McGrael]

this poem is super super super super super coooool

i really like it

i would give you some constructive criticism... but i cant think of anything

[Kaitlyn]

No, I love all of it, especially the end. I love the repetitiveness where as any other time it would really annoy me, it works. I think this is my favorite so far and I want to read more! Great job!

[Amalie]

oh em gee...howl...you scare me >

[Aekmy]

That was cool. :D