the sea

quick one done frome promt of the sea

booming sounds, echoing from the sea,

the waves crash ashore.

Running in rivelets, every crevice arrested

my heart thumps in time.

white foam glistening as i shield my eyes

a harsh winter sun

the swell rushes towards me

threatening my toes

I Watch it recede - wondering 

just where the sea-life goes.

Author's Note

comments and criticisms welcome

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

Your word choices creates the perfect imagery that the reader can expect... I loved serenity your poem brought in my mind, and how descriptive your words were... "I watch it recede-wondering/ just where the sea-life goes" brings a thought provoking view in my mind... I think you were spot on with the prompt... Lovely...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[hcarson]

I thank you hreatly for it, iam useless when left to my own mind for prompts...i just go blank lol. Thank u for your lovely comment

[Jade]

This is so good and wonderful feelings as well. Very well written

[mou]

true, sea has the most deepest sound and most lovely place to heal the heart..and if its during night time when no one is there then it's a gift..so soothing and emotional..after a long long I'm at wc and at your page too..it's nice to find my friends again :)

[Dave]

You use your words to paint right on scenes of the shore. I'm reminded of all the times I have "played tag" with the onrushing rivulets making their way to the beach. Very nicely done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting ...where does it go when it recedes?

is it like some people who touch boundaries but then recede into themselves?
life roars like a sea...do we just touch our toes, or do we march full into it and swim at great risk...hoping to stay afloat.???

[hcarson]

i tend to jump in head first and flounder..wondering what the hell i was thinking in the first place lol

[hi]

i like it, good write,
kinda makes me want to go to the ocean

[hcarson]

thank you hi, it was a word prompt from a friend so done quickly..the poem matches you pic :)

[hi]

hahah, true the poem do match my pic, but i never noticed, but i have to ask, what do you mean by done quickly?

[hcarson]

A friend said do a poem about the sea annd i jotted it quickly in a few minutes so didnt really take time to try improve it. 😊

[hi]

why do you need to improve it? if you the writer thinks it is fine then there is nothing wrong with it,
to me the whole point in writing is to write what you want, not what others want, let them write there own stuff,lol

[hcarson]

Aha now that is very true!! I do sometimes get caught up in altering it to suit what others think it should be rather than using my own mind!! U make a very valid point there i will try in future to bear in mind!! Thank u for that ☺