a fireball of tears (posted on my blog and another platform)

Like a Sufi's moth seeking the candle, only, to be burnt by worldly love

Don’t be burning, oh heart;

don’t be yearning

for those who can’t afford a love like you,

mistake life for this and that routine,

hold on to joys so dull and mundane.

 

 

You are in misery,

burnt from the core.

They can’t possibly cease,

these fireball tears.

 

 

And yet, one hopeful day,

also this hurt will fade away.

Don’t be dismaying, oh heart:

You will not always be ablaze.

 

 

You took your other half as love,

devoted to it your innermost.

However mesmerizing it has been

A mere mirage is all that it was.

 

 

Don’t be yearning, oh heart;

don’t be burning.

You loved to self-annihilate

What difference does it make?

Someday, this burn, too, will abate.

Author's Note

This poem reflects one of my few attempts at a rhyme. I am mostly writing free verse. While I have not yet posted a large enough number of poems for you to compare/contrast (a difficult feat all by itself due to content differences alone) but if you would, please, do let me know, if you feel I should stick to my previous style/format.

Reviews

[Patrick]

I read this aloud and recommend other to do so as well. Your rhyme scheme is beautiful and the selective nature of your words is quite brilliant.

[Ed Hart]

it's always the case, oh heart, but what heart ever listens

[HulyaY]

R.F.Jordan: my warm thanks to reading my poem and commenting on it in such a supportive way. I don't take any conclusion that states "this is poetry" for granted. Ever. I am now encouraged with rhyme scheme more (I have been mostly writing free verse - still my addiction but...)

[HulyaY]

Thank you Poetgurl. I appreciate your reaction very much.

wow, this is pretty darn amazing, i like the depth in it

[r. f. jordan]

this is poetry. i appreciate the rhyme scheme, even if the author's note states novice status with such. the stanza scheme assists with the movement in the piece from misery toward perspective. Good work.