The Truth

the depression hid deep within
those fading scars
the everlasting fresh wounds
from where the blade tugged at her skin
tearing through the happy,
eliminating the sad
dismembering the good
throwing away the bad.

Author's Note

I honestly have no idea, what do you think so far?

Reviews

[Daffy]

Well, it could go either way. I mean it is complete a it is and describes well how depression acts on one. I can talk from experience, as I have suffered with depression since birth. However, you could add more stanza's. For example, when you get the feeling and want to develop this, you could write a second verse describing how we come out of depression...say by concentrating on good things, or loved ones and their care. This would be a positive end to this descriptive poem.
BTW, I assume you mean: 'tearing through the happy' ...Lol D

[DJ]

So far, it is a very pain filled and emotional piece, one that so many can relate to. Depression is such a hard thing to live with, resides deep down and creeps out to bite you whenever it desires. A good write my friend.

[zaneybear]

I believe im done with it i'm just unsire honestly, I don't know what else to write, and that's usually a sign that I have to be done.

thank you so much for your kind words, as you always have nice things to say and very helpful advice :)

[DJ]

It does sit quite nicely how it is. I don't think you need to add anything to it. Trust your creative instincts, especially on emotion based writes, you are right when it comes to your own personal feelings my friend.

[zaneybear]

thank you so much for your kind words and advice deary (: