Strange

Loud wind,

Ice cold,

Three layers of coats on,

Fog smoking out of mouth.

As I walk down the gray stone road,

I find I creepy house.

Trees dancing,

Water dripping,

Wooden logs broken,

Spiders crawling

I knock the door,

I ring the bell,

“Hello? Is somebody in there?”

Door opens,

Sound creeps,

Window panes bang,

Darkness increase

I look for light switches,

But I can hear only my footsteps,

As I take another step,

I step on a soft thing kept by.

“Meow” the cat sounds,

I scream,

I run out of the house,

And I see the name plate beneath,

‘Mr. Kitty, since 1926 till

Eternity’

Reviews

[Elizabeth J. Gelinger]

This poem made me give a small laugh. Simple yet very enjoyable.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you!

[DoormanDan]

Well, that was an enjoyable read. I will admit that I'm not the biggest fan of the way you ended it, but hey, it still works, and it did a bit of a chuckle out of me (in a good way). I don't know why, but it just felt rushed to me, but more than likely I'm wrong. Anyway, good job. Keep on writing, my fellow writer! :)

[iamshadowine]

Thank you for reading and leaving your honest reviews :)

[DoormanDan]

No problem. :)

[D]

It was a sort of fun read, well penned.

[iamshadowine]

thank you :D

[D]

my pleasure :)

[Emily]

Love it!!!
You did an awesome job on this!!
Keep it up!!

[iamshadowine]

Thank you 😊

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Interesting twist on a classic horror theme.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you 😊

[Lyn Anderson]

This piece appears to have captured many imaginations. The form, and clipped words, work in its favour to build suspense.
I would think I find I creepy house is a typo? (a creepy house), as well as I knock (on) the door?
and a soft thing kept by doesn't translate well -- perhaps a soft thing near by?

[Meshalini]

Ohhh....this is very suspense from the beginning to the end..
I enjoyed it very much..
Nice one....

[iamshadowine]

thank you :D

[Jackie]

Quite fascinating. I sure do enjoy the spookyness of it. Great read!:)

[iamshadowine]

thank you! :D

[Ruth]

What a uniquely mystifying piece...grabbed my attention from beginning to end, original and very cool :)

[iamshadowine]

thank you :D

[Mifa]

Nice poem. I particularly enjoyed the ending and how it added to the creepiness of the entire narrative. For a moment, it felt like the suspense was being followed by a drum roll. Nice one Shadowine.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you! :D