Falling

The falling is a small prescription of attitude in the form of a poetry that everyone who fails in life must possess deep in their souls and minds to rise stronger and gentle.

The deeper I fall, loftier would I rise, 

To all who judge me dwarf, I am Everest in disguise!

Pity not me for the failures I owe, witness the light I will illuminate with my rise,

solitary preached me innovation, critics taught me wisdom.

I have the oath to make, that might make the mortals shake, 

victory would be my slave, and humility my master. 

erect spine I wouldn't possess, for pride prepares disaster.

Optimism remains my fuel, so the best is my ride.

Stars! You stayed always high, wait for my body to die,

I will dwell in the seventh sky, in my feet your vanity will die.

Foes and abusers will throw the dice, I'll let them cry of surprise.

I will fail, I will fall and I will go along,

But engrave in your minds,

The deeper I fall,

Loftier would I rise.

Author's Note

Please lend this poem with your valuable comments and let me know what you think about it. :)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"Amazing use of words and thoughts.I will fail, I will fall and I will go along,
But engrave in your minds,
The deeper I fall,
Loftier would I rise."
The above lines. Perfect. Allowed the reader to feel and sense the rise and fall of emotions. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[ZeeShan]

Its always awesome to get reviews like these. Thank you.
stay here, your generous feedback really matters. :) :) :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure to read your work and you are welcome.

[Najam Us Saher]

Wow. To all who judge me dwarf, I am Everest in disguise! This line is very thoughtful. I like the entire poem.

[barleygirl]

I love the beginning & ending, very clear & truthful about life . . . the hardest lessons have made me into the best version of me. There are some great lines that conjure good imagery & convey your overall message, such as: line 2 (well-stated contrast & visual, too) & line 7 (common sentiment stated with originality). But some of the lines are a little less clear to me. I'm not sure if it's becuz your use of English is a little unusual, or if it's becuz your style is vague & nuanced, whereas I prefer straightforward telling (personal preference, not a bad thing on your part).

Just to let you know, some little people take offense at using "dwarf" as a way to describe a short person. To be more considerate of such feelings, maybe a different word would be good.

[ZeeShan]

Thank you, mam. I will certainly work upon your suggestions.