Hanging

My first attempt at haiku

Spring turned to Winter
Its beauty now lost to me
We had no closure

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

cool

[Corset]

spring- turn-ed to win-ter/6 count unless there is a rule about -ed's that they don't get counted on syllable counts, if I could maybe suggest :

Win-ter end-ed spring/5
its-beau-ty now lost to me/7
we-had-no-clos-ure/5

also since this implies human emotions about closure with the me and the we, I think it might be considered a senyru which is another form of haiku, but that maybe subject also, I am no professional by any means on structure, I love the concept though, however depressing, lol, jk... it's awesome!

[icaros13]

Nice catch... I'm not sure on the syllables. I just counted as I say it lol... I like your version too. Thanks!

[Corset]

I do that too! lol

[Tsukin Archangel]

hmmmm spring turned to winter....i dont quite get that line...seems kinda backgrounds but the other two i understand and i think are great good job

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. beautiful work ...
. vivid and sensitive and skillful ...

[Emily B]

yes!