Cast Me No Pity

Tires sing on wet pavement
and the sun hides out for today,
my mood  heavy and cloying
it's a dark dreary Sunday.

This time rain provides no comfort
no soothing or salve for the soul,
instead it's a pileup of heartache
that feeds a hungry black hole.

The other shoe is just hanging
waiting for its turn to drop,
here at the edge of such chaos
it will fall but never quite stop.

The glass seems mostly half empty
Or was there a glass at all?
It feels like it's been forever
I've stood with my back to the wall.

But please cast me no pity
I know it could be much worse,
so instead of me just weeping
I've decided to cry it in verse.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

good for you Ice ... we are taken to the edge over and over it seems ... then quite mysteriously it happens... we are calm... confident in comfort of the Highest Power ... and no matter the tempest .. we have become the fortress it breaks on...instead of alone; back against the wall; being pounded... great poem.. so grateful for where it leads me this morning...
E.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you kind sir! I absolutely love your review.

[Einstein Noodle]

peace and joy Icy Blue ..

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

"But please cast me no pity
I know it could be much worse,
so instead of me just weeping
I've decided to cry it in verse."

I can relate to this, Ice. I also escape into the world of poetry.
Well-written!

[icelandicblue]

It is a lovely place to escape to isn't it.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Yes, it is. :)

[Debbie_Philly]

I know how you feel in thi Jacob.... I have this feeling myself allot.... way to write it out... wonderfully penned !! :)

[icelandicblue]

Thanks for reading Debbie.

[Angi]

That's the way to do it, Blue. Crying in your hands won't do a thing but give you a stuffy nose and a headache. Well done. Angi~

[icelandicblue]

This is the truth! Thanks so much Angi.

[s y e]

Everyone has their own little pity party... some pity party lasts longer than others. This is a great write Anne, I loved it. You've written it spot on.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Noodle,

I'm not crying today so that's a good thing!

[isus]

nice mood expression, like it

[icelandicblue]

Thank you Isus.

[Muse]

We all have our little pity parties. Some of us just wallow in it longer than others. When the weather begins to turn cold I start to feel the blues. And I drown in my pity party sometimes for several days at a time.

[icelandicblue]

It's true, the weather can intensify negative feelings. I have a friend who has one of those SAD (seasonal affective disorder) lamps that she sits under in the winter and she says it does help with the blues. We are like flowers, we crave the light. Thanks so much for commenting.

[Jack...]

Love the shoe hanging, waiting for its turn to fall. A dreay Sunday, not much motivation to do anything but laze the day away and think. If only we could find the time to smile as we while away these hours. Very well done my sweet friend.

[icelandicblue]

Yes, just another dreary Sunday but it's a sunny Monday today.

[Mark]

Nicely crafted this write seems like maybe it is cartharsis?

[icelandicblue]

It was meant to be cathartic. It didn't work as well as I had hoped. Oh well, thanks Mark.