if a wish could be granted

How i wish you were here

to take my soul away

to get out of this fish bowl world

so i could smile for a day

seeing where to go

because where you are is heaven

to me,its the right way.

 

-if that someone never see's this i wouldn't care,the sweetest thing are the things you can't see.

Reviews

[Marc]

thank you,i'll take ur comments into suggestion.Haha its fully noted! But thanks you all...

[Tony Hwilka]

A fine poem. A suggestion--3rd line instead of this fish bowel world --my fish bowl or my bowl. the bowl is a world see what I mean. I think it would make for a stronger poem. Anyway it is a good write.

[Dalaina Renee]

I loved this! I wish I could have a wish!