constellations

a poem on the constellations

Let's watch the constellations

each with their own correlations

with great consternation

with the concentration,

of an entire nation

Author's Note

what do you think?

Reviews

[Sindu]

I think it's simply effulgent! Impeccable! Beautiful try Amy.. :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

I like this and its rhyme,, but I feel it would be better if it were little longer,
a good write here

[snow_angel]

Nicely done. I think most would find the constellations to be fascinating.

[Botania]

A very fun write. As a nation we do watch space. Imagination dwells there.

[J.M. Santós]

I really like this, Shapirta - I do believe you can do much more with this and make it a little longer, your vision in this poem has potential. But it is wonderful! Thank you for sharing!
-Jess

[BennyBooth]

I love the rhyme of this piece! I think you did a really nice job with it... :))

[Ashira Macy]

Fantastic word play and rhyme in here. This would be a great way to warm up your speech before a show too since it requires diction so that you don't get tongue tied.

[Shapirta]

thanks! =).... wait is that a compliment?

[Ashira Macy]

Yes it is! I love tongue twisters!

[Shapirta]

then thank you!

[Shapirta]

wait, try to say THAT ten times fast

[Ashira Macy]

Haha that one isn't too tricky.

[Shapirta]

well, twists my tongue!

[Regina K. Pride]

I like how you took a simple sounding idea and transformed it into a more complex one. You are really good at rhyming. I feel like there is more to the story (or poem) than just these five lines. Maybe you can expand them a little bit more? If you chose to do that then I think you should keep these lines but have them italicized and still be the first stanza in the poem. It could be the introduction to a more in-depth look at the constellations. Good job! :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice tongue twister. When you looked up on clear nights in Afghanistan it was like you never knew there were that many stars in the sky