The First Time I Saw You

FIRST CRUSH AND NOT BEING NOTICED!

 

 

 

The first time I saw you

my heart melted,

my knees went weak.

I couldn't breath.

I couldn't speak.

All I could do was stare.

 

The first time I saw you

you headed in my direction.

I began to sweat,

until you walked on by

to your special someone.

I realized

The first time I saw you

you didn't see me.

 

Author's Note

HOPE YOU LIKE IT!

Reviews

[InkSlinger]

Wow, didn't see the ending coming.. The last two lines just blew me away.. WELL DONE.. enjoyed every line!! Keep up the good work!!

[Jeremiahh]

ouch! me gusta this poem! I'm sure lots of people will be able to relate. Good job!

[Invisible Ink]

great ending and I sympathize with the feeling... I think you should take the last 2 lines ...
The first time I saw you
you didn't see me.
and write another poem about how that felt, you are very good at showing feelings!

[Bridget Mcmaken]

wow wonderful poem. Love it!

[Goodbye]

Yup - that's the story of my early High School years. Very good write!

[Wondering Mind]

very sad ending, I really didn't expect it. Well done.