The mirror said "I hate you"

something i just thought up one day

The mirror said "i hate you" so i think ill kill myself tonight. That's what she said,   before she took the razor, dragged it across her skin and sat in agony. She sat there like a doll waiting to be played with, for she had never experienced that before. The door is wide open, for anyone to see, to see this girl crying out for attention and that's exactly what she got. It kind of puzzles me with the question of, was the mirror helping or hurting the girl?...well the mirror got her the attention she wanted, but yet, it made her almost kill herself. 

Author's Note

tell me what ya think.

Reviews

[Ama May Cooper]

Far to short, it lacks the length for the story line to really unfold making it more like an ending to a tale than a tale itself.
A nice feel to it tho, the message needs more time to unfold tho.
A good write

[Kira]

Well, here's what I think. Too short, for one, though you could have fit the message into just a paragraph, but didn't. I do like the line "The Mirror Said "I Hate You"", once at the beginning and the end. The grammar and flow was a bit choppy, the sentences too long. With some revision I'm sure it could be a great piece, but right now it seems a little dusty.