Beautiful Young Woman

A beautiful young woman

trapped in a world not meant for her

She is a product of rules & regulations

She is feeling smothered,

yet curious about what is on the other side

As she stands in her livingroom

her husband sits in his chair with a vacant look in his eyes

Sophisticated yet comtemporary looking

but the darkness that is within him tries to control her

She just can't take it anymore

She walks over to the fireplace

climbs on top of it & in her dream world

looks for a way out of this what seemingly wonderful home provides

She is wondering if she can escape from it while

her husband is ever so despondant

She stands in her heel boots & poofy blue dress he has her in

He expects her to look a certain way

playing off of her innocence

She is just a world away

she ponders what is out there

It looks dark from the inside

but really it's the unknown that is being seen

Should she or should she not take that leap

 

 

Reviews

[(JR) Joshua Hernandez]

Love the imagery and the style of writing. It definitely pulled me in and painted a very real picture. Good piece.

[Im His Daughter]

Thank you for the review :)

[A Soapy Mess Stories]

I know the feeling of being controlled by someone who is supposed to love you...well written...

[Alicia Schroeder]

Being controled alone would be devistating, I'm thankful I don't have to act a certain way to please my spouse, I'd take the leap if I had to.. Great peice

[Dayran]

I've been at the same cafe for almost 2 years for my coffee. About three days ago ... one of the waiters ... who had always been attentive ... made a personal remark about me that was out of line. I've switched cafes ... but its a bit of starting all over ... re-cultivating my thoughts and their orientation away from their favourite haunt. It'll take a while ... but I'm prepared to do so. Its always a matter of how far we are prepared to go ... as your poem clearly says. Nicely done.

[BubblingMe]

It is straight to the point and it has beautiful view!

[wordman]

no one should live that way, love is a lot more at least real love

[Nilesh Ratnam]

lovely!!!

[Anonymous]

Oh wow, I love how calm and almost haughty the husband is, like he knows that she'll never actually leave. It's sad, yet amusing (if that makes any sense, like I don't mean in a sadistic way) I like it :)

[Midday_Mystery]

Great Write and very interesting I may need to come back to this one