misspelled

i use to know this girl that use to channel her fillings threw misspelled words keep her moist handkerchief stash deep within her canister... i use image her held captive in my heart forever Caterpillar scares and self mutilation feathers... unbalanced leverage was the  teeter totter that fuel her vendetta ..for those who presented her with child play make believe and candy coated tainted dreams and something that could never be to know what its like to spell the word love.....

Reviews

[just rose.]

I like how you play with misspellings here and I think this is very well done. The images are fresh and interesting. I wish almost this were in stanzas and lines because I think you risk losing some of the power of it. That's because, without punctuation, the reader's eye doesn't get a place to rest. But perhaps that's your intention, and I can certainly get the spoken word/rhyme sense here. Rock on.

[Dutch Jr.]

I'm feeling this. You can paint pictures with your words, nice job.