Why?

Why?

 

Been down before,

-loved for less

and hated for more.

Made such a mess

I can’t keep track,

but there’s no going back

and it’s too late

to ask her to wait.

She’s made up her mind,

 Left me behind

like the dreams of a child,

 or creatures of the wild.

My friends say I’ll survive,

live long without her; the question is why?

Reviews

[CreativeStroke]

Your rhyme scheme really drew me into this piece, especially with the emotion you put behind every word. Well done Inda!

[Inda]

Thank you so much glad you reviewed!

[Adam Whitworth]

It doesn't feel heartfelt at all, it's not moving in the least. The question really is why did you write it??
Don't worry, some of your writing is good :)

[Inda]

Thanks, i don't know if you're being sarcastic or not, but i found your review funny. :)

[quinfinn]

there is never an good answer to your question here, my friend. even if there were it wouldn't ease your pain. very heartfelt write here, good sir poet!

[Inda]

Thank you! Glad you liked it.

[Carolann Dowsett]

You have so much emotion in your work, I love the way you can tap into that even if it is fictional. Another great write :)

[Inda]

Thank you :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[Baby Ricochet]

You will survive. Trust me on that bro. Great poem.

[Inda]

Thank you! Although this is all fictional i do appreciate it. :)