Moirai

Moirai                

 

Out of reach,

I stretch,

But still

This craving

I cannot fulfill.

Waiting

On fate; selfish w****s

-always wanting more.

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Yes. There is so much said in so little words. Those last three lines, well, obviously you know they are money ;-) Seriously intense write, Inda. Thanks so much for sharing this with us.

[Inda]

Thank you so much, means a lot. :)

[Tree]

Damn. Great little piece Inda. I like how you constructed this. It rolled slowly out of the mouth then you brought down the hammer. Optimal effect.

DPaz

[Inda]

Than Diego glad you liked it. :)

[Quiet Child]

this is a great write! really good structure. very parallel to what i normally see from you. keep it up!

[Inda]

Thanks, your words mean a lot!

[Quiet Child]

ah, your welcome. anytime. (:

[Baby Ricochet]

I like it. It's kind of a Buddhist message. THe root of all suffering is selfish desire. Good write

[Inda]

Thank you Ricochet; very profound interpretation! :)

[quinfinn]

we are, all of us, selfish w****s....when it comes to love. jeezaloo, Inda...i know you are a terrific writer, but this, it is superb! those who read between the lines will feel your passion, awesome!

[Inda]

thank you