Hypothetical

Hypothetical

When every word creates a wave,
What will you say?

When fantasy and reality sway
and love threatens to run away...

What will you do?
Will you laugh too?

Will you call me weak
because I chose not to speak?

Reviews

[Trigorin]

You have a good concept but I think you could have used more heightened imagery. While I do understand what you're trying to do with the questioning tone, I think it's been done before and I feel like it comes across as more indecisive than earnest. Instead of questions only, throw in some answers. Don't leave it all up to the audience.

[Inda]

in this piece i intended to have the questions unanswered; so as to be answered by the audience, but if I add answers it changes the tone of the poem as well.

[s y e]

This is a great piece, love how you have unanswered questions in this piece, nicely done. Very smart!

[Inda]

Thank you! Means a lot.

[Quiet Child]

this is great! i thoroughly enjoyed it, its a creative piece. great job!

[Inda]

Thanks!

[Quiet Child]

Your welcome!

[quinfinn]

sometimes the waves our words create are too much for the person swimming in them and they can't get their head above water. fantasy and reality almost always cross paths but never the twain shall meet. this is some pretty stunning thinking, Inda...i like this . very strong write.( check the spelling of your title though)

[Inda]

Thanks for taking the time and reviewing and I corrected the spelling :)