Knees Beg

-Knees Beg-

Blood shut eyes
Still identify
The lies, the dead butterfly
By the door.
I long for the ocean; you the shore.
Self hate,
Mandate
Passed down,
Colors drown
The light
And hide what's right.
Sunset, orange and gray;
Knees beg and you stay.

Reviews

[plainme]

A tremendous flow of words, they cascade one by one. A bit like following a person that jumps down a waterfall, at the end a big splash of emotions awaits.

[Inda]

Wow, thanks for those comments!

[Quiet Child]

really good word usage for this one. enjoyed it! keep it up (:

[Inda]

Thank you so much!

[Quiet Child]

welcome! (:

[Baby Ricochet]

Says a lot in a few words. Good one inda

[Inda]

Thanks! Means a lot!

[K. Louis]

colors drown/the light...i like this line very much.

[Inda]

Thanks, glad you liked it.