My flame

You're a flame; dancing,
Orange, red and blue.
You've got me waiting.
-Longing for you.
You are lightning
strinking
down.
-Me, I'm the cold, wet ground

Reviews

[Horizons]

Firey Flames i'd say. Creative poem, enjoyed reading the piece. Well done!

[Baby Ricochet]

I liked this. Good one inda

[Inda]

Thank you all for the reviews! :)

[Balkaran Sidhu]

well penned...nicely structured...orange blue...the flame .. (y)

[plainme]

A nice short poem, a word jumps into my mind : slow. It's a slow poem, one that you can really enjoy line by line, building up some tension as you jump read from one line to the other. The last phrase is definitely majestic.

[Dreamer]

Great structure, keep up the good work

[Pollai]

Very nice structure. Really well written

[s y e]

I loved the structure of this write, thought you wrote it excellently.

Well done.

[Quiet Child]

absolutely love this! great write! (:

[Inda]

Thank you! Glad you liked it. :)

[Quiet Child]

welcome!(: