A Beginning

A Beginning

 

Her hands were shaking,

My courage breaking,

Somehow I stumbled on to her lips,

One hand on her face, the other on her hip;

That’s how it all began

-never mind how it will end.

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

one stanza ... you didn't need anything else to convey all the feelings and all the images of one of the most emotional moments of a relation. Say you've been great is simply not enough, man. You've been more than that ! Honestly one of my favourites !

[Inda]

Thank you so much, glad you enjoyed it!

[s y e]

One stanza, sometimes can be hard to pull of but not when your name is Inda, no, no, no, this is a beauty!

[Inda]

Lol, thanks for this great review Noodle!

[Inda]

You broke with her together,
Shaking....

It seems like the perfect new start,
A dance to love, but a worried mind
yet for an ending... great poetry.

- Elisa

[Inda]

Thanks Eli,as always i'm glad you stopped by! :)

Welcome welcome my friend :) always a pleasure reading you!

[Baby Ricochet]

Ah the plot thickens........