Unable to Speak

found myself ready to hold,

letting go.

she called out

and I could hardly breathe,

reached to feel her touch,

trembling.

this was more than an impulse,

or a simple I love you;

it was more than most

and less.

thoughts fluttered,

honestly, why bother

with the prose

and these words?

this mouth is weak, quiet,

 and futile,

unable to speak.

Reviews

[tim.reed]

Beautiful job showing versus telling. The language is stunning.

[Helen Crutchett]

I hope you've got your voice back now! This was full of emotion and showed exactly what happens when "one's breath is taken away". Enjoyed it.

Good luck

[Inda]

Thank you!