Lost

This is one of the first real poems I wrote. It will turn 1 on July 14th

 

 

 

 

I'm dying all alone in the abyss

I need somone to guide me back to salvation

I’m shedding blood and all my tears

I’m fading deeper into the darkness

As I unravel, my heart grows heavy with regret

I’m sorry that I betrayed you

Can you forgive me and grant me your love once again? 

Reviews

[DanaRegen]

Very nice poem,
Im lost, full of regret and dying, a drastic poem indeed, great job, and keep up the good work!
-Dana

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Lost is a good title for this kind of piece. Overall, I like it. I can take this any number of ways; a spiritual yearning, a loving relationship lost and hopes of rekindling, or even vampiric.

"As I unravel, my heart grows heavy with regret" ~ I like this line. I think as you grow older and your perspective changes you will build up this piece. So never toss it. It's a great start and can become even better. Nice write.