Boy and Girl {1}

An online conversation between a broken couple. Girl's perspective.

Girl logs on.

Boy logs on.

Girl: hey                                                                          Pleasepleaseplease answer.

Boy: hi

Girl: how are you?                                                                 Say you miss me. Please.

Boy: really good. what about you?                             Should I lie? Should I tell the truth?

Girl: great! everything's great!                                                                            Lie.

Boy: that's good.

Girl: yeah.

Boy: look, i'm sorry, but I had to leave. i couldn't be with you anymore. 

Girl: No, it's okay. I understand.                                              I don't understand at all.

Boy: Are you sure?                                                                                        No.

Girl: yes.

Boy: stop lying. 

Girl: What?

Boy: I know you. I know you're not okay.                                    He reads me like a book.

Girl: Fine. I'm not okay, and I don't understand why you just left me! you didn't even say goodbye!

Boy: I know. I'm sorry.                                    You think sorry's gonna cut it? Think                                                                        sorry's gonna piece my heart back together? 

Girl: why didn't you say goodbye?

Boy: it would've been too hard. breakups are messy.              Not as messy as getting                                                                                                        ditched.

Girl: you're just a coward.                                      Where did all this nerve come from?

Boy: I know. 

Girl: come home. i still love you.                                                         I still love him.

Boy: i can't. i've met someone else.                                                 He doesn't love me.

Girl: but i love you. 

Boy: i knew that when i left. it changed nothing.                                    He's killing me.

Girl: give me a second chance.                                                                        Please.

Boy: i'm sorry, but i have to go.                                                           This is the end.

Girl: no! stay!                                                                                He's already gone. 

Boy: i really am sorry.

Boy logs off. 

Girl: i am, too.                                                                             I love you. Forever.

Girl logs off.

Author's Note

A short conversation between a girl and a boy who used to be together. the italics are the girl's thoughts as she's reading and talking with the boy. i'll be doing a sequel that has the italics in the boy's perspective, so you can see what the boy was thinking too. review? truthfully, please.

if you're wondering where all the reviews went, well, look on page 2. my friend commented a whole bunch on here, and i deleted them all (they were silly), and now its blank on page one. so if you'd like to see the reviews, please skip to page 2. thanks.

Reviews

[KT]

This story really speaks to me, because sometimes when I'm having a conversation with someone on chat or whatever, I don't always say how I really feel. I could be doing really crappy and I'll still tell them I'm okay. Awesome job, very good! The dude kinda sounds like a jerk! lol ;)

[Ness of Love]

Omigoolosh, this made me cry, its so good! I can't believe how well this depicted the after-story of a break-up

[Pugglove]

I loved it and I cant relate to it so I thought it was amazing :)

[KAREN]

Love the set up, and the emotions that flows are felt through out the poem.

[emma]

to Jasmine Thousand: that's an interesting idea, to show the boy's perspective. maybe i could do a follow up story that is the same lines, but instead see what the boy is thinking. thanks for the idea; i'm definitely going to think that over!

[Jasmine Thousand]

It's really, really, good, but I'd like to see what the boy was thinking as well. It's so sad for the girl. That guy is really a jerk. He shouldn't even have answered her hi, then he wouldn't have hurt her as much!!!
~Jasmine Thousand~

[BloodyMary]

I love this.

[paparapapa]

I hated the guy. Period. =))) Ugh, this one's really frustrating. But it is written beautifully. I liked the format of the story. Great job. ;)

[13ReasonsWhy]

Wow tugged at m heart. Amazing.

[Unknown]

very different from your other stories nice change:). i thought that she was gonna end up murdering him, you got me surprised! awesome!