One Simple Cut

A swipe of the blade

erases all of his misery.

The blood that drips

is all the relief he needs.

He sighs and closes his eyes

letting the red paint the floor.

His heart stops beating

and his hands go limp.

The blade falls from his bloodied fingers

his whole life ruined by one simple cut.

***

His body, limp and lifeless

He invades her dreams.

She sees his face everywhere.

He has come back for her.

She knows she screwed up

she regrets her cruel words.

She knows it was all her fault

and she knows he loved her so.

But he ended all of that

by one simple cut. 

Author's Note

for an acquaintance. not my best work, but, whatever. review?

**awarded 3rd Depressing Writer in the Depression contest**
**awarded Sad:( in the depressing poems contest**
**awarded made me sad in the depressing contest**
** awarded ♥♫♪Best Poet♥♫♪ in the ♥♫♪Poetic♥♫♪Poetry♥♫♪ contest**

Reviews

[Brenden Moran]

This is really good, I like it. Few things though, lets see...line 10, replace "with" with "by" so that it is grammatically correct. Line 12, place a "He" at the beginning of the line. Rework line 14 a bit, kinda awkward. Line 15, "screwed up" perhaps might be a more accurate representation of the mood you are trying to set. Hope it helps. Good job once again.

[Amplyyours]

I don't know if it is your best work, however this is one I have felt the most. The darkest of the room with light shining off the knife as the it cuts into flesh and spilling liquid of life. The sheer pain of her words as tears line the contours of his face and the heavy heart of the poor girl who unintentionally set it all in emotion. And the burden of living with that for now and in the future, what a great ride it was.

[Desmund Tiny]

I can feel the pain in this poem...... sad but very nice work.

[Sarah]

It is very good but very sad. nice write....

[Caitlyn Murray]

Really good

[Break The Broken]

beautiful pain. sounds familiar, i love it, very relatable, your amazing with your writes keep it up C:

[Jenni-Chan]

that is harsh but true. also it's very sad

[Jennifer]

Love it!

[paparapapa]

A beautiful tragedy. Good job! :)

[Thea]

Aw! >,<
So hurtful, I must admit!
Anyway, excellent poem...
Stunning concept!
:)))

[Ness of Love]

This speaks out. Love is painful