The painting feels incomplete

The painting feels incomplete. The unfinished mansion, a river surrounding it with green giants and people swaying to a false tune, joining them in harmony. The mansion crumbles but it cannot be saved. The crystal waters however still flow calmly and the green giants and people bask in the sun’s requited warmth. The pearly white paint flaunts its unique shade from the palette and hypnotisingly calls the paintbrush to dive into its crevices. As the white tainted brush paints the first few bricks, trickles of cerise seep into the now murky waters that violently crash into its banks. The people’s faces begin to bleed down the canvas and on to the beige meadows; their joyful dance comes to a painful halt from the screech of each stroke of the mansion. The pearly beauty stands finally complete. A waste hot stream surrounds it with a clear view of cities miles away and the wispy meadows decorated in crimson strokes and chestnut graves, yet the painting feels incomplete.

Author's Note

Interpret this however you think so. No view is wrong.

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

Sometimes what the artist wants to paint and, indeed, begins to paint.. halts in showing itself to the man or woman wanting to offer beauty to Presence: it is a possibility not quite ready to show itself. Forced efforts often lack beauty.Just as a certain phrase might not provide sincerity, a painting can Produce rather than Create a certain plain.
Your finely laid words offer a possibility of thoughts too.

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[Raven]

There are conflicting facts within it. This is one painting with a castle that falls and rebuilds on the same canvas? A river surrounding it? Do you mean a mote? I'm not sure what a waste hot stream is? Not critiquing, just trying to figure it out.

[sleeping beneath the waters]

The mansion falling and being rebuilt can be imagined as the painter not being able to paint the mansion as they want it to and restarting it each time hence the "crumbling part". The river is meant to be a literal river, apologies for the surrounding part because it's not meant to be a mote. Lastly the waste hot stream is meant to refer to the trash filling up the river. Maybe avoid viewing it in terms of a literal painting to help it make sense. Hope this helped!