One man gone

The world of silent words

can tell me where to go

if I could only hear

pictures of their show.

Strange is way I looked

at one who I don't know,

one that's getting close

to the galows pole.

And he slowly turned my head,

showed me abyss of the dead -

path all mortals need to walk.

For the moment I felt free,

then I felt so terribly,

that my voice could never talk.

Author's Note

so, tell me what you think..

Reviews

[Angel]

I'm completely lost, here. Is your protagonist facing the death penalty? Is he a murderer?
Perhaps he is contemplating murder...and wondering if he is willing to pay the ultimate price?
Or, perhaps he is suicidal...contemplating that final "freedom"...

In any case, this is a chilling piece, cutting to the quick.

[isus]

thank you. he might have kill someone before (i don't know), he's only a human though.

[Baby Ricochet]

Good rhymes. Keep writing

[isus]

thank you :)

[Nijura]

very powerfull impression for me..:-)

[isus]

thank you :)

[Frieda P]

I'm not sure what this is about, at first I thought it was about someone on death row, then I flipped to suicidal thoughts, you've got me discombobulated, but whichever it is, it's affecting and seems a lonely place to dwell. Nicely pen'd isus.

[isus]

thank you a lot, it wasnt about suicide but now when i read poem i see why you saw it that way and it isnt wrong, beautiful fredom of interpretation :)

[leahanne]

I really enjoyed this. When I read this poem, I feel a sense of emptiness. Very effective.

[isus]

im glad i managed to transfuse feelings in that words, even a little. glad you like it :)