Burn the religion

written in some five minutes, probably something worst you'll ever read (i find it still amusing)

The moment I give you my power

everything can break down in pieces

and left us in the middle of time

on strange lane where Sun is on the side,

but you know

that

this is not the 

only Sun,

and

we are only

smallest pieces

of All

and of everyone

so maybe you know

that I want to

see it all

and I just want 

to see it all

and up the end of all existence

I'm just cluster of some atoms,

completely as you

perfect in its stupidity.

Author's Note

where did you went?

Reviews

[RichGee]

My friend do not underestimate your talent...remember, first and foremost we write for ourselves...
Whether to vent, send a message or simply for the heck of it.
Not everything we write will be enjoyable to everyone but somewhere someone will identify with it...
And if nothing at all, it ours to do with it what we want....
Good work and keep them coming.

[isus]

i know we write for ourselves, but thats why it can't be good enough, i always want it better, i want it epic, but im not capable enough yet (i think so). but thanx for your kind words :)

[RichGee]

Keep on keeping on....read read read and write write write...practice makes perfect!

[isus]

yes, i can agree to that

[verity94]

I really like the last few lines in this a lot, good work ^_^

[isus]

thank you, glad you like it :)

[DIVYA]

Fascinating write. Especially about this not being the only sun. Very nicely said.

[isus]

thank you but i dont think its fascinating, charles baudelaire is fascinating :)

[Shaquana Adams]

It's a bit confusing considering the title, but otherwise it reads nicely. Nice job :)

[isus]

thank you, im glad you like it :)

[Brook]

"I'm just a cluster of some atoms,
completely as you
perfect in its stupidity."

So beautiful. You're a great writer!

[isus]

thank you really, but i think you exaggerate :)

[Brook]

I certainly do not exaggerate, i'm just being honest.