Story

In

low space in

lost meaning

curling

swirling

around my legs,

there are two

of them

right now,

try to notice

them riding

on the ice.

Reviews

[Melissa S]

Short and simple, yet open to the imagination. Love the title too, it sort of pushes the reader in a direction, but the poem allows them to make their own interpretation. Great job yet again! :)

[isus]

yup. thanx for reading Melissa :)

[Rachelle]

Intriguing…. what could they be?

[isus]

what ever you want them to be :)

[Rachelle]

Kittens!!!!!

[isus]

there it is :)

[Karen]

I pictured both my children "curling/swirling/around my legs" as they ride on the ice while I attempt to not bend down and pluck them from their fun. Very interesting penning!

[isus]

nice pictures indeed :)

[ScoobyDooby]

i pictured many different things, and i like how you left that up to the reader to decided what they see. good piece and keep writing c:

[isus]

good noticing :) thanx for reading

[Baby Ricochet]

I pictured cats,.............

[isus]

hahahha this is the best, i just read it again and i totaly see what you mean hhaha

[Ghost of Jupiter]

haha Sorry to pop in on this Baby Ricochet, but I think Isus your cat theme follows you! haha.

[isus]

hahha i never thought cats will be point of my writings :D

[A. Amos]

Good one my friend........

[isus]

thanx........

[Kasey Miriam]

Wonderfully done. Creates a very strange imagery that is fantastic

[isus]

heheh thanx :)

[SonOfPlunder]

Creates some weird images..i like it!

[isus]

i know right :D glad you like it

[Emily]

I like your wording in this one too!

[isus]

thanx :)