Through Trip (Street)

probably not final version.

Endless fun like endless sorrow

burning in the hollow ground,

leaving Sun for us to follow

till there is no other sound.

And do you even know for sound,

do you know that you can hear it?

Have you ever seen true color?

-Try to imagine new one,

try to find just one new color.

Out of time and out of mind

I don't really wanna bother

will I live or will i die

in flash of light, in stroke of thunder.

Reviews

[Emily]

I just love how you started it off, it got my attention! Good job Isus!

[isus]

i belive you, rest is s**t, i also like start, that's why this isn't final version probably

[Baby Ricochet]

You can look for new colors at Home Depot

[isus]

hahahah you think they have them? :D

[Pinkyleeamy]

Nice one. Finding new natural and beautiful things r rare these days. Great flow.

[isus]

which new things? :)

[Pinkyleeamy]

i know right! so dam rare you forgotten what its like to hear new!

[Madalyn Beck]

I really like this. I can also see that there is probably more to come. Good job so far! (:

[isus]

thanx Madalyn

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Some good lines here. Maybe a few mistakes of grammar but it reads ok. Not criticising. Good job.

[isus]

i'm really bad at grammar, sorry

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

No worries. Plenty of help if you need it. Don't be afraid to ask. Lots of folks on here are happy to check your work before you publish. It's your ideas that are important not how you spell.

[isus]

thank you but who knows will any of my work ever get published

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Arrrh non of us know the answer to that one. Just keep writing. the more you do the better it gets. We're all here to help. Clive

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Well you got the wheels turning in my mind that has left tire marks ion the street of dreams. That is a good thing by the way.

[isus]

thanx thanx

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Welcome welcome.

[melissa]

Another great poem keep up the great work i can't wait to read more keep them coming

[isus]

ok melissa i will