Looking Through

I will find it out,
soon I'll find a way,
I wont bother you no more,
there won't be another day

I can't take it with my hands,
would you like me to be you,
far away, far away,
sun is blue, sun is blue

Reviews

[Jennifer Shaw]

This poem reads like a goodbye kiss.

[isus]

in a way it was

[barleygirl]

I like the first stanza, but I don't understand the second stanza. You express interesting ideas & some good imagery, but sometimes the poem as a whole does not gel together in a connected message.

[isus]

there is some metaphor here that you can interpretate for yourself

[barleygirl]

Some people like to dig deep to find the meaning, but not me. I'm more into "straightforward"! Thanks for reaching out & sharing. I hope you find the right kind of reader who can embrace your meaning.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Its very different, I didn't quite know what to make of the meaning of it.
It sounds very deep though, and like it was written from your heart.
Keep writing :)

[Blood Ink Diary]

And, well, feels wonderful to return after a long hiatus and to read your world. Shall return in due time to catch up.
This verse has captured any human loss in an intricate fine manner...keep mpenning my friend. Cheers

[isus]

thank you for sharing thoughts :)

Interesting read.. only suggestion ... maybe take the word it out of the first line so it reads smoother without bumps unless the word "it" is specific and you want it to showcase that there is a "it"... nice write..Thank you for sharing