Hidden In Summer Mind

Watchin' the world go by

Brood in the deep

A need to fly free

Lost with the birds

Delicious ambiguity

A reckless driver

Restless sleeper

Hidden in mind

Away from the weepers

Time is dissolved

The wasted days

Its not a waste, I pray

Soul beam the way

The dreamers in 

Fused  the light 

A worth we see

Sundown, we're alive

Unlike the vision

Heard the flock of youth

Only two are clever

Speak for a virtue

Blast your wits

Break your step

Shot with the words

We have well kept

Quit before you break

Rest before you sweat

Leisure is empty

No chance to be best

Contradict all speech

Dignify a way

Never been yourself

Trapped inside day

Geared, engineered

Appear, built apart

Fly alone in space

Indestructible heart 

Picky,  can't choose

What I want, not mine

Perception so untrue

Spent in the wrong time

A ramble to the moon

A wish in the dark

Release the bad

As I follow the stars

Author's Note

let me know what you think. honest opinions. love you.

Reviews

What I enjoy:

1) "Sundown, we're alive" Hits the reader with a subtle surprise
2) "Dignify a way" A wonderful, unique phrase
3) "Never been yourself/Trapped inside day" A great concept

What could change:

1) "Hidden in mind" To me, this line is a little dry
2) "Soul beam the way" The word "beam" could be improved upon to make it more unique
3) "Fused the light" In addition to the extra space between "Fused" and "the" :) I think you can search for an even better word usage instead of "fuse"

[Sbernie18]

I really like this poem a lot. Each stanza has a really good feel that keeps the story moving. Its very deep and moving. Good write