Script for Video of Originology Journal

I am soon going to be launching my magazine. I am working on the script for the promotional video. The concept itself is quite lofty yet complicated which has made writing the script (while keeping it to a short length) a bit tricky. I will not explain here the concept whereas that is the purpose of the script: to both inform and excite. I am looking for feedback as to if the script makes sense. After reading, do you somewhat have a concept of the magazine? Is it captivating? Does it flow? Too wordy? Too vague? ALL Feedback is very much appreciated! Thank you in advance!