Hello Old Friend

A poem about relapse.

Hello old friend

Long time no see

Now you are back to temporarily set me free

This cold sweat is burning through my numb skin

Like ice in the desert this is a battle I cannot win.

The sirens are calling through my window again

Such sweet beautiful music signals the end

The angels are calling but my line is on hold

The operator is busy

My game of cards it shall fold.

My eyes open wide to a striking white light

Plastic eels in my arms

My throat wrapped up tight

My old friend has gone but just for a while

When he comes around again I will try not to smile.

Reviews

[Larq]

Intense emotion...life and death struggle. In the last line, the narrator sounds hopeful, but slightly unsure...hard to be strong. Small victories count! Very raw and real piece...well done.

[Jamie]

Thank you :) Yeah I was going for the whole hopeful yet unsure feel!

[Jennifer Shaw]

Love this. Very moving. Strong emotional expression.

[Jamie]

Thank you Jennifer :)

[Layi Tate]

Now you are back to temporarily set me free

This cold sweat is burning through my numb skin

Like ice in the desert this is a battle I cannot win.



Good write I love the depth in this ........

[Jamie]

Thank you! I think this is best I've ever wrote lol

[Lola_Bee]

this is amazing, and i paint a picture of sadness and a battle yet it unfolds so beautifully and real. great work

[Jamie]

Thank you I really appreciate it :)

[Eleanor]

All your poems are really powerful and have a deep meaning.
You definitely have a talent. Loved reading your poems.
Keep writing like this :)

[Jamie]

Thank you very much :)

[Matching Socks]

I really like your use of metaphor here in this one.
Plastic eels in my arms, that is brilliant.
Solid poem Jamie.

[Jamie]

Thank you Ana :) this is my best piece so far :)

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome Jamie. :)

[misha]

This was a great poem. There was a strength in this that I loved. Great job!!

[Jamie]

Thank you so much :)

[misha]

You are welcome