Good morning.

I could lay with you forever and a while

Just to wake up and see you smile.

Your heart beats under my fingertips

As I kiss your velvet crimson lips.

A vision in white the angels do sing

As our heart and our soul become one thing.

You slowly awake and kiss my cheek

As the stars get some sleep way down in the creek.

Reviews

[Maglia Weaver Twill]

Sweet, I like "I could lay with you forever and a while/Just to wake up and see you smile" that is sweet, it seems like the "velvet crimson lips' must be quite seductive. The "heart and soul becom[ing] one thing" is what I thought love to be like or supposed to be, and I might understand it might not in terms of life on this earth as we know it, but I have always liked that idea that the "heart and soul" could become one thing

[Jamie]

Thank you :)

[willweb]

Very nice little love poem, small but filled with desire for that special someone. This was really nice.

[Jamie]

Thank you :)

[Gabrielle Linch]

This is so beautiful. I absolutely love it "Your heart beats under my fingertips, As I kiss your velvet crimson lips." Is probably my favorite line.

[Jamie]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate it :)

[Layi Tate]

Your heart beats under my fingertips

As I kiss your velvet crimson lips.

Beautiful combination of emotion here

[Jamie]

Thank you :)

[A. Wrin]

For someone who has ever had the privilege of spending time in bed with someone they deeply love or care about, this speaks novels in only a few words. It's quite sweet and subtly passionate. Good flow also.

[Jamie]

Thank you I really appreciate it :)

[Voiceless]

Short, simple writings like this always get me. This was really sweet. And it made me smile. Like seriously, who doesn't want this? Good stuff.

[Jamie]

Thank you so much :)

[Diana]

I like the rhyme in this. I'm reminded of those mornings where you lay in bed and listen to the rain. The rhyme is similar to the perfect pitter-patter of raindrops.

My favorite lines: "I could lay with you forever and a while/Just to wake up and see you smile."

[Jamie]

Thank you Diana :)

[Laura Lay]

That was so romantic and sweet. Loved it

[Jamie]

Thank you :)

[MomzillaNC]

Very sweet and romantic. The last line was a nice gently humorous touch.

[Jamie]

Thank you :D

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[Woody]

such a sweet and tender love poem. well penned Jamie.

[Jamie]

Thank you :)