Scent

Something I put together hope you all like :)

A golden teardrop slowly streaking down her face

As her crimson thread shadows this place

Her heart once full of life and love

Is now dragging her down she has had enough

The sirens get closer and the commotion rises

3 figures in black with human disguises

An ocean of regret washes over her

But the sharks already have her scent

Her life this night has been spent.

Reviews

[Gabrielle Linch]

I love how the sharks are her supposed "monsters". It's a new twist. Beautiful writing over all!

[Jamie]

Thank you Gabrielle :)

[Voiceless]

Very nice. The imagery here is really something else. Really enjoyed this. Especially the last line.

[Jamie]

Thank you!

[Skai Rain]

I like how this poem is very story like. Bravo, my friend!

[Jamie]

Thank you Brit :)

[Layi Tate]

Oh damn!
I was not expecting that lol
You got me !

[Jamie]

aha :) Thank you :)

[Layi Tate]

No thank you .... ;)

[Luna Zerimar]

"A golden teardrop".

I loved that.

The ending is beautiful. x

[Jamie]

Thank you Jessica! It means a lot :)

[Lizardo]

really nice to read, i like this line: ''Her heart once full of life and love
Is now dragging her down she has had enough'' lovely to read

[Jamie]

Thank you :)

[misha]

What a beautiful and sad write. Great job!

[Jamie]

Thank you Misha :)

[Jamie]

Thank you Misha :)

[Matching Socks]

Very moving. I'm not sure the context in which it's been written but to me this speaks of a woman who has been beaten down by men at every turn. She finally gives up. It's rock bottom and a tough place to claw back from.

[Jamie]

Thank you Ana :)

[Shadow Paradox]

I like the visuals here. When I read the poem and reread the title it fits perfectly and gives a deeper meaning to this poem. Its seems she is wounded and the sharks which is the darkness are after her. Just thoughts. Nicely written!

[Jamie]

Thank you :) Yeah your spot on :)