This Unholy Place

Just a short one :)

In a city of broken angels

Where these lovers come to die

Pushing through the strangers

Just to live another lie.

The gutters are inviting

To these two who are lost

Just another reason to give up on their past

To dive into the turmoil and live amongst the rats.

The pungent stench of loss

Is the atmosphere of this place

These angels are screaming to be found again

In the dark corner of this unholy place.

Author's Note

All feedback welcome!

Reviews

[Elisa]

This is so powrful. I really like the strong images you've used. Living in LA, which is literally "The City of Angels" in English, I can definitely relate to this poem's message. Great great job!

[Jamie]

Thank you very much Elisa :)

[Nessie_AJ]

This was such an intriguing piece! For me, it reminds me of how religion draws people in because it seems to have what we're looking for, but too often, it seems we are shunned by people because we are "inferior" or "unholy." Amazing work!

[Jamie]

Thank you very much! :)

[Christa]

It may be short, but it is lovely. Very nice writing. :)

[Jamie]

Thank you Christa :)

[Christa]

You're Welcome!

[Kylie W.]

This is really amazing writing. Short but with meaning.

[Jamie]

Thank you Kylie :)

[Jamie]

Thank you Kylie :)

[Voiceless]

This was amazing. That first stanza got me hooked. Short and to the point. Thank you for this.

[Jamie]

Thanks! :)

[Gee]

Great opening verse,for me lost it in the second but saying that really enjoyed the content.

[Jamie]

Thank you :)

[Gee]

You're welcome

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Sad and heart wrenching piece... So many get lost looking for a way out of such dark times... This is a short, poignant write, truly well done.

[Jamie]

Thank you very much!

[Matching Socks]

I hope 2015 shines it's light on these two Jamie.
All the best to you.

[Jamie]

Thank you Ana :) Hope you have an amazing new year :)

[Lizardo]

This one is very deep and I love the second stanza
Very fine work Jamie, I love it

[Jamie]

Thank you my friend!

[Lizardo]

you are welcome