The Dead Of The Night

How one man feels when all is lost.

In the dead of the night

My heart beats your name

These voices pile up 

In this bizarre card game.

Through the dead of the night

I lay covered in sin

The w****s of my mind

Tearing me within.

Under the dead of the night

Her angels see me

Pulling me free of this mortal misery

A kiss on my lips these angels do cast.

The dead of tonight comes too quick to last.

Author's Note

All feedback welcome!

Reviews

[Helena]

I liked this one a lot! your sins and her angels... who is a read dead?!!

[Jamie]

Thank you Helena :)

[L.E.Osborne]

I chuffing love the end line 'The dead of night comes too quick to last' awesome line. I enjoyed reading the entire thing as usual great deep stuff! :)

[Jamie]

Thank you very much :D

[Jennesis]

The darkness of night can be a scary thing....the demons of our misery come out. Nice job with this Jamie. The line "W****s of my mind tearing me within" is powerful. I think we all have those....

[Jamie]

Thank you Jennesis :) xx

[Gee]

Silence and the dark heighten the senses and seem to make matters more clear.Nice job Jamie

[Jamie]

Thank you :)

[Matching Socks]

Well done Jamie, sometimes the thing we want comes too quickly leaving us unsure if we're ready for it.

[Jamie]

Thank you Ana :)

[Voiceless]

I can totally relate to this. Times like so, one sometimes feel that the darkness is a beautiful thing. Good stuff!

[Jamie]

Thank you!

[Lizardo]

Really dark, I love the dark atmosphere and momentum of the poem.
''The dead of tonight comes too quick to last''
One great poem, I enjoyed reading this one
Great work!

[Jamie]

Thank you! I really appreciate it :)