Here I Stand

When you take a chance and tell someone you true feeling for that person.

, Here I stand before you
Giving you all that I have inside
Before you I stand
With my hands outstretched to you
What will you do?
Will you take this love I have
Or will you turn your back
Here I stand my heart beats
Blood flows though my veins
My mouth shapes the words
That my soul has shaded
It seeps through my skin blended into the air
As you just stand and stare
Here I stand before you
Will you teach me
Or shall you preach
The reason why not
As I stand there weary and damaged
My walls begun crumble
All the wrongs will they become right?
In this moment will time continue or it will stop?
Along side with my heart and soul
Once it hid behind the veneered
Now it is open ever so venerable.

Author's Note

What is your thoughts as readers

Reviews

[Aila]

Hi Jasmine,
I really like your poem because it is very well written, and also very touching.
The feelings are there, bare in the open, without any "literary mask".
My favorite part (cannot say why, it just is!):

Here I stand before you
Will you teach me
Or shall you preach
The reason why not

Love, love these lines...

Sorry, I don't feel that I am in a position to rate your work (or anyone else's, actually!)

Take care,

Aila

[Teddybearlee]

Another one, you have the way with words I so wish I had. Beautifully done, I can mentally picture it all.

[Inject Positivity]

"Here I stand before you
Giving you all that I have inside
Before you I stand
With my hands outstretched to you"

These opening lines just touched my heart, I think you have beautifully expressed the innocence of a heart that flows with love... As your poem moves on it explains and describes so many beautiful things... This is how we think when we think of telling our feelings to the person we love but we hardly find our courage to express our feelings... Well done Jasmine...

Sincerely
Dhiman