Stoic You...

 

Is there something wrong with this skin
embroidered by the slaves and their Conquistadores
Sticking to yours like an adhesive

Stoic you
 

only your eyes dance
and shall we dance further
after I've already fallen
for you

 

for all of you who tumble like grapes rolling off a tabletop
  one
         after
                another
Too many to count
Stoic you

 

Is there anything wrong with these lips
these hands that play for you
This elbow, this forehead, these shins
being admired like equisite artwork by those dancing pupils

If I hated you you'd be forthcoming
you'd more than ask for my name
and my lips

but I've already
              fallen

 

 

 

Reviews

[Peteypie]

that was preeetty =]

[Deborah Shepard]

beautiful style

[DeAn]

ahhh yes, passion. my undoing. so far we fall.

nice poem love.

-Dean

[Orlando Murcia]

I love your style of writing don't change a thing, You are very creative. Orlando Murcia

[Vanessa]

I admire the use of poetic phrases here, as well as the arrangement.
With very little grammatic errors and a stunning view by words, this is a great poem.

//Vanessa Alyse

[David Darabian]

I'm certainly no regulard among the poetic shelves in the library but I like this. Don't know what I like about it since I'm not even close in calling myself a poet but to quote Dalifixion "I like it."

[Zillion]

I like it.

[deliriousgirl]

"being admired like equisite artwork by those dancing pupils"

OHHHH DAMN!!! Those delicately wrought words just melt me to a little puddle of orgasmic ooze!!!

[Autumn's Child]

This is absolutely wonderful! I am a big fan of the staggering format, and I love using it in my own poetry. You have an excellent way with your words.

[The Hatter Girl]

Great choice of words. The way you arranged them is excellent, makes the reader keep reading xD